Revision Sample 2

First draft – https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GX79U3941M_IwjYq6FkWQ-JGLE2E3jJ7d4CH-FET2uM/edit

Final Draft-  https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YvlXQLJW_NCZ563P3Jk49_d1sqXxwjJ4Kmo19QeMdbM/edit

 

During this essay I faced countless challenges. One of the main challenges I faced during this essay was trying to find the right moment to write about. It toke me a while to come up with which memory to use and once I found it, I struggled with trying to remember all the details to add to the essay. During this essay my revision process was more of adding detail and building on my story so it was more appealing to the audience. During this process I had a growth mindset for learning different ways of looking at my essay and how to add to it to make it better. I become more welcoming to suggestions on how to make it better from my peers. In high school when we would write essays we never did a system of peer editing. Doing this helped me learn what I can do to write a better essay.